Mist on the Water
Mist on the water
Forest on the rise
Two canoes together
Desire in your eyes
White water river
Swollen by the rain
Thunders over rocks
Drowning out the pain
Remember when we cut
Mixed our blood together
Blood brothers we would be
And lovers forever
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Photo with kind permission of http://bythecanonviewfinder.blogspot.com/
©DGA 08 August 2011 19:08
Adeeyoyo's Blog 
09/08/2011 at 6:13 am
“White water river
Swollen by the rain
Thunders over rocks
Drowning out the pain”
…. this is a clever a follow up after the last line of the first stanza. The symbolism, if I did get you right, is exceptional. delicate, evocatively suggestive and highly commendable. I am stuck up with the beauty of these lines Denise.
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09/08/2011 at 7:29 am
Thank you for your compliment, Sunamu, and for liking my post. 😀
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09/08/2011 at 7:15 am
This would make a great song, adee!
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09/08/2011 at 7:19 am
it would!
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09/08/2011 at 7:33 am
Gee, thanks Sidey. 😀
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09/08/2011 at 7:30 am
Thank you, Cin, but despite my writing sometimes to music in my head, if you could hear me sing you’d run a mile. 😉
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09/08/2011 at 10:43 am
I guess there were a lot of memories mixed up in there Denise.
I agree the poem scans well enough to be set to music!
John
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09/08/2011 at 11:15 am
Mixed up memories – you’re so right, John… bitter-sweet…
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09/08/2011 at 12:27 pm
nice…did my first white water trip when i was like 14…it is such an adrenalin rush followed by some amazing calm in the smooth spots…but beneath this you refer to brotherhood which is something very special…
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09/08/2011 at 1:04 pm
I was looking through this blogger’s, http://bythecanonviewfinder.blogspot.com, gorgeous photo’s and a couple of them brought back this memory so clearly. The blood brother thing was my first real boyfriend’s idea and I loved it!
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09/08/2011 at 2:07 pm
That is a great poem, congratulations!
You can add the picture to the poem if you want.
Cheers!
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09/08/2011 at 2:31 pm
Thank you so much Adrian, on both counts. I would love to put it up.
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09/08/2011 at 5:38 pm
That reminds me a lot of childhood. Loved this.
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09/08/2011 at 5:48 pm
Thanks BV! You know that feeling with your first BFF when you realise that he LIKES you too – wonderful! We were on and off for years…
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09/08/2011 at 9:05 pm
A very interesting layout in those first stanzas. The lovely nature memories, followed by the personal connotation. I may have to steal this. It really works.
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10/08/2011 at 2:29 am
Thank you so much Mike. This is really a great compliment. 😀
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09/08/2011 at 11:31 pm
Canoeing on inland waters is so peaceful and calming
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10/08/2011 at 12:35 am
You had me at canoe Denise! I used to portage with my late husband and this made me think of the good times we had out there in our wilderness of two. I also love that you used one of Adrian’s photographs. He is a talented artist, as are you my friend. 🙂
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10/08/2011 at 2:40 am
I think I was born in the wrong era, Val. It was very kind of Adrian to let me use his photo. He does have some wonderful ones, particularly of white water. Btw his umbrella photo inspired my Yellow Umbrella poem.
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10/08/2011 at 2:32 am
Yes it is, Bb. I would never do it in the sea! Mind you, we canoed around Durban bay to Salisbury Island and back again, in the old days of flamingoes and mangrove swamps.
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10/08/2011 at 3:02 am
I think poem and picture complete one another. Thank you very much.
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10/08/2011 at 3:16 am
Ah, yes I agree… and thank you</. 😀
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10/08/2011 at 5:34 am
It does read like a song and it has the same rhythm as a canoe sliding through the clear water. I can feel my fingers trailing along the side of the canoe as the mist envelops the trees. Gorgeous!
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10/08/2011 at 6:14 am
You’re making me homesick for yesteryear, Selma, trailing fingers…
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10/08/2011 at 11:35 am
this is a gorgeous picture. it makes me dream of holidays!
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11/08/2011 at 5:11 am
Thank you for the visit and comment, Laura. I’m so glad you liked my post 🙂
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