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Invisible 2

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Chosen for her easy nature

Pliability, malleability

Plasticine-like quality

To be moulded into the perfect wife

To share his ambitions

His dreams and drive

T’wards the perfect life

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And she, in love with love

Flattered and thrilled

Sweet-talked and cajoled

Happy to be chosen by this boy

From all the girls around

Was quite giddy with joy

To be the one he’d found

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(unfinished)

©DGA 14 October 2011 02:07

Author: adeeyoyo

I am a middle-aged South African woman, living in Johannesburg. I began writing poetry towards the end of May 2010. I love animals – sometimes more than people! I am back after a break. Thanks for still being here, if you are! Missed you! xxx

14 thoughts on “Invisible 2

  1. The unfinished part is when she finds self reallization in who she is rather than what she must be for someone else.

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  2. It’s so easy to fall in love with the idea of being in love . . .

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  3. Naivete, innocence, and youth, form a mixture to intoxicate. Yet the “morning after” hangover has no equal from libation…

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  4. How fascinating to watch the thoughts and the poem developing, Denise. I am wrestling with a poem at the moment, but it is inside my head, and I can’t show the development like you are doing. Brilliant.
    Thank you
    John

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    • I have done my posts like this because I am actually on ‘borrowed time’ with my internet access. Trying to get my contract sorted out and expecting to be cut off at any minute. Glad you’re enjoying watching my thought processes, lol! 😀

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  5. It is almost a pity to take this one further. As it is, it opens up a vista of speculation as to where it went from there. Did she adapt perfectly to the mold – and ended up boring him? Or did she break out of it and fall out of fascination with him just as he fell in love with her? Or …

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    • Oh Col, I have been in a quandary about those very things… or whether to split the poem into two different endings? Btw, nice to see you back again 🙂

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  6. nice progression…we see her motivation…waiting for the rest….smiles.

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  7. Is she in love with love, the sweet talk, being singled out or … the boy?

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