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SMOKE

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Smoke curls

Unfurls

Wafts

Through the air

To disappear

No trace

No trail

No hint

No tinge

Vanished forever

Into the ether

Another soul

Passed

Sacred fire

Funeral pyre

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©DGA 03 November 2011 06:07

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Author: adeeyoyo

I am a middle-aged South African woman, living in Johannesburg. I began writing poetry towards the end of May 2010. I love animals – sometimes more than people!

36 thoughts on “SMOKE

  1. Great post today thanks. I enjoyed reading it very much.

    Feel Free to Share this wonderful poem with everyone:

    – A River of Time –

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  2. Certainly another way of looking at, ‘vanished in a puff of smoke’!

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  3. Thank you for this one Denise.

    Another soul passed… You always imagine a way that brings my beloved David into each day.

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  4. Good poem, sad subject, Denise

    Thank you
    John

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  5. Here today . . . air tomorrow.

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  6. I adore this, Denise. The ending reminds me of the Indian pyres: to everything there is a season….

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  7. I like the way this got my mind wandering in thought.

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  8. I love the mysticaL feeling that this poem evokes, Adee – reminds me of those scenes on the Ganges

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  9. I can’t help but see the smoke emitting from incense…at yes, a Funeral…

    So Evocative…Thank You ♥

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  10. Excellent poem adeeyoyo – good structure and rhyme (I like the almost rhymes eg. forever, ether) and the image of the smoke disappearing, as the soul moves on is very effective.

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  11. Even smoke is made of molecules and atoms, and though we may no longer see it as smoke…the soul of it still lives.

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  12. So true Denise. From ether we come and unto the ether we go. Life is an enduring cycle of integraton and disintegration of elements. Smoke is a good symbol of our ehereal nature.

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    • I like the way you put it, Sunamu, ‘integration and disintegration of elements’. That sums it up very well. Thank you. I agree smoke is a good symbol.

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  13. The soul is indeed like smoke…gliding from body to body.nice metaphor. 🙂

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  14. Far reaching and fleeting at the same time, Denise! Very nice indeed! 😀

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  15. Ah, thank you Tom. 😛

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  16. ive drifted away in the wind reading this poem 😛 just like the smoke
    heaps cool 🙂 soothing sort of poem, love it!

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