*
Smoke curls
Unfurls
Wafts
Through the air
To disappear
No trace
No trail
No hint
No tinge
Vanished forever
Into the ether
Another soul
Passed
Sacred fire
Funeral pyre
*
©DGA 03 November 2011 06:07
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03/11/2011 at 6:54 am
Great post today thanks. I enjoyed reading it very much.
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03/11/2011 at 7:17 am
Thanks so much for your visit and comment. 🙂
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03/11/2011 at 1:20 pm
Certainly another way of looking at, ‘vanished in a puff of smoke’!
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03/11/2011 at 2:36 pm
Hahaha, you’re on a roll today, Col! 😛
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03/11/2011 at 6:30 pm
*reflectively* Yes, and in UK it was a case of roll your own when it came to a smoke … 🙂
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03/11/2011 at 6:53 pm
Hahaha, too clever today! 🙄
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03/11/2011 at 3:43 pm
Thank you for this one Denise.
Another soul passed… You always imagine a way that brings my beloved David into each day.
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03/11/2011 at 4:57 pm
Thanks Maxi for liking this. Smoke rising is a euphemism for the soul rising upwards…
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03/11/2011 at 4:36 pm
Good poem, sad subject, Denise
Thank you
John
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03/11/2011 at 5:00 pm
I intended just writing about the nature of smoke, John, and the rest just wrote itself and surprised me.
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03/11/2011 at 7:19 pm
How often that happens, Denise. I get the same result. The poem can take you where it wants to. Thanks again
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03/11/2011 at 7:45 pm
Strange, isn’t it. I hear novelists have the same thing happen too! 😆
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03/11/2011 at 7:30 pm
Here today . . . air tomorrow.
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03/11/2011 at 7:53 pm
We all end up in nature’s ecosystem one way or another, Nancy. 🙂
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03/11/2011 at 9:37 pm
I adore this, Denise. The ending reminds me of the Indian pyres: to everything there is a season….
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03/11/2011 at 10:02 pm
Thanks, Kate, that is what I was alluding to… 🙂
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03/11/2011 at 10:39 pm
I like the way this got my mind wandering in thought.
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04/11/2011 at 4:26 am
Thanks, BV, that’s a good thing… 😕
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03/11/2011 at 11:28 pm
I love the mysticaL feeling that this poem evokes, Adee – reminds me of those scenes on the Ganges
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04/11/2011 at 4:27 am
That’s what came into my mind as I was writing, Bb. 😀
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04/11/2011 at 1:20 am
Great poem. I enjoyed it very much.
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04/11/2011 at 4:29 am
Thanks for the visit, Tim. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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04/11/2011 at 4:12 am
I can’t help but see the smoke emitting from incense…at yes, a Funeral…
So Evocative…Thank You ♥
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04/11/2011 at 4:31 am
Lovely picture, FTP, and I do like incense. 🙂
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04/11/2011 at 5:35 am
Excellent poem adeeyoyo – good structure and rhyme (I like the almost rhymes eg. forever, ether) and the image of the smoke disappearing, as the soul moves on is very effective.
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04/11/2011 at 6:14 am
Thanks, Gabe. I am a fan of almost rhymes, just have to be careful not to overdo them, lol!
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04/11/2011 at 5:41 am
Even smoke is made of molecules and atoms, and though we may no longer see it as smoke…the soul of it still lives.
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04/11/2011 at 6:16 am
Yes, nothing ever completely disappears, Jack. Only to the eye…
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04/11/2011 at 8:15 am
So true Denise. From ether we come and unto the ether we go. Life is an enduring cycle of integraton and disintegration of elements. Smoke is a good symbol of our ehereal nature.
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04/11/2011 at 8:35 am
I like the way you put it, Sunamu, ‘integration and disintegration of elements’. That sums it up very well. Thank you. I agree smoke is a good symbol.
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04/11/2011 at 5:19 pm
The soul is indeed like smoke…gliding from body to body.nice metaphor. 🙂
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04/11/2011 at 5:43 pm
Thank you, Epizeuxis. 😀
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04/11/2011 at 10:45 pm
Far reaching and fleeting at the same time, Denise! Very nice indeed! 😀
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04/11/2011 at 10:53 pm
Ah, thank you Tom. 😛
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07/11/2011 at 2:09 pm
ive drifted away in the wind reading this poem 😛 just like the smoke
heaps cool 🙂 soothing sort of poem, love it!
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07/11/2011 at 9:17 pm
Thanks, Kieran! 😀
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