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Anguish

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the agony

and anguish

unbearable pain

rips, and splits

tears me apart

wrings out

my heart

like an

old

floor

rag

d

u

m

p

e

d

.

©DGA 10 November 2011 21:02

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Author: adeeyoyo

I am a middle-aged South African woman, living in Johannesburg. I began writing poetry towards the end of May 2010. I love animals – sometimes more than people!

32 thoughts on “Anguish

  1. It truly does make us feel so deflated and empty.

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  2. Well done! Love the shape, the metaphor… and everything about this poem (even if I’m not really that fond of pain or anguish in any way, shape or form).

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  3. Fantastic poem, Denise, and I echo blueviolet’s ‘deflated’ comment. Effective!

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  4. Aww . . . hope your anguish dissipates, Denise. Pain is unpleasant enough without the mental despair.

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  5. looks like upside down tear drop

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  6. wrings out literally………………………..to the last drop. aesthetic description.

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  7. Exclamation point format, to a sad ending. Yet it could be followed by a question mark format, What went wrong, what is wrong with me, what did I do? We always put the burden on ourselves in situations like that, never on the other person,,,until, the anger sets in. Agony, anguish, then anger..The heart’s cleansing agent!

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  8. Very Emotionalizing…
    Love your passion. I feel your pain, and yet, see your strength…
    Love Ya
    paul

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  9. how something like this give me so much pleasure is a mystery. well done.

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  10. Oh, it is such a dreadful feeling …

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  11. Oh Denise, this description is perfect on the loss of a “first love.”

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  12. an old floor rag…that is a very low feeling…love how you stretched out the end like the air leaking out of the balloon…

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  13. Such an apt comparison, Adee, in this excellent poem

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  14. Sad but great poem, Denise. Totally expressive shape. Sorry I’ve been away. Hospital for couple of . days. recovering now.

    John

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    • I’m so sorry to hear that, John. I assume it was the same problem as before. Did they remove it this time?

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      • Yes, Denise. A rather beastly op, took twice as long as it should.
        But all gone now, and I am slowly recovering.
        I hope to bring some more poems to my blog soon.
        John

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        • I’m so sorry, John. Get well and strong again soon. At least it is over and done with. I’m looking forward to more poems from you. Take care, my friend.

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