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Shadow Mouse



He flattened himself, slid under the door,


Then reinflated on the other side.

He followed the angle ‘tween wall and floor

As around the edge of the room he crept,

A little gray ghost with his nose ahead,

A dark silent shadow melting, melding


Almost invisible as he progressed

Towards the room where the food was kept.


©Denise G Allen, 26 January 2013 10:53

The idea for this one came from Brian Miller’s cranial mouse nest, lol!

Author: adeeyoyo

I am a middle-aged South African woman, living in Johannesburg. I began writing poetry towards the end of May 2010. I love animals – sometimes more than people! I am back after a break. Thanks for still being here, if you are! Missed you! xxx

16 thoughts on “Shadow Mouse

  1. This is gorgeous 😀 “Pancake-wise”, “shape-shifting” – such perfect expression


  2. Oh, this is priceless, adee. I so enjoyed. 😀


  3. in slips the mouse quiet and on his mission..where they can slip into as well is pretty crazy at times…


  4. That’s exactly what they do . . . rubber bones!


    • Such an apt expression, Nancy! Cute little thing, ha! Until I discovered he’d been into my cupboards and when I lifted the new bag of flour the bag came away in my hands, leaving the flour behind on the shelf. Also he had made perfectly round holes from one cupboard to the next.


  5. Those opening lines are beautifully descriptive of the way they seem to do that!


  6. This is an absolute beauty Denise. WoW! Really wonderful description as fluent as the flow of the mouse.


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