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Post No. 870




Is this how it felt

spit out of the womb

cold after the warm

his eyes wide as the room

would not meet mine

unreality fogged my brain

sp-l-it me open

‘til there were two

one watching through my eyes

while i died


©Denise G Allen, 08 September 2015 16:31

Author: adeeyoyo

I am a middle-aged South African woman, living in Johannesburg. I began writing poetry towards the end of May 2010. I love animals – sometimes more than people! I am back after a break. Thanks for still being here, if you are! Missed you! xxx

2 thoughts on “Spit

  1. Yikes, this is a bit scary. I hate to imagine being conscious as my body is cooling before death.
    This gave me a bit of a shiver honestly.


    • This is not SciFi; it really happened and is as clear to me today as it was then. When I read about people floating above their bodies this was very similar, except we were side by side. I think shock drives this to happen as a self-preservation thing. Whatever. Also, as it happened time froze for moments. Btw, the first three lines are pure fiction. Thanks for reading, x.


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