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Journey through Hades

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Journey through Hades

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I thought we were two halves of a whole,

But how wrong could I be?

There was room for only one

And it wasn’t me.

I was trapped in a trip through Hades,

The prey on a spider’s web,

Watching dust motes

Floating on a sunbeam,

Envying them their freedom.

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©DGA Friday, 12 August 2011 12:11

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Author: adeeyoyo

I am a middle-aged South African woman, living in Johannesburg. I began writing poetry towards the end of May 2010. I love animals – sometimes more than people!

20 thoughts on “Journey through Hades

  1. Dust motes create an unhealthy environment for humans. I wish your sun beam would cook em all.

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  2. finding freedom in the dust motes…providesa great contrast to the plight of the narrator…i like…

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  3. Ouch, Denise. No one should be that much a captive to love. A gread discripton of freedom though.

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  4. Often we hold the keys to the prison we’ve created . . .
    All we have to do is realize it.

    Love the image of the dust motes.

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  5. Some feeling of horror at your poem, Denise.
    Reflects the expertise of your description
    John

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  6. Gosh, that’s stifling! So glad this is only a memory!

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  7. I love the regularity and rhyme of the first part, and for me this would go even better if it were echoed in the second – as three lines do. Then the next three break away.
    Great, nevertheless.

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    • I know what you mean Col. I need to look at it, or even go through all my poems, with ‘fresh eyes’ and edit them where I can. Now that will be a project and a half, lol!

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  8. Hey Denise,

    “Dust motes floating on a sunbeam”…
    Motes of dust floating are but our yearning and despair against the backdrop of Hope of sunbeam. Yes we yearn for our beloved to visit us … to share the emotion if not the pain. It’s a travel through Hades when you have to encounter it on your own. Your poetry is getting crystalline more and more. I enjoyed it.

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    • Gee, thank you Sunamu, those are really lovely words of encouragement. And your interpretation of the motes and sunbeam is spot on too I think. I’m so glad you enjoyed it.

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  9. The horiifying imagery works very well in this one, Adee

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  10. I can feel how trapped you were. The images of the dust motes highlights how difficult it was to break free. There is a wrenching feeling there that is very powerful!

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